Originally posted by stockenYou should save this and enter it in the next prose competition. Guaranteed to be a winner. Well done, my friend.π
There once was a man, incredibly arrogant
A burden of torment he was clearly carrying
You see he was lonely
So obvious if only
he could find a little love
he'd be happy like a dove
Now, the way he went about earning attention
is so inept suffice it to mention
he brought fury and frustration
to the people of his "congregation"
Yet he kept writing ...[text shortened]... nd
Unless you stop preaching your boring lore
you'll no doubt be dissapointed at it all
Non sub rec.
Originally posted by Red NightWhat makes you think it is the ending. It may only be the beginning.
Nice poem. It looks like you spent a lot of time on it.
The last two lines are a little wanting though, don't you think.
Instead of lore how about advice or message and it needs a stronger ending. Just my opinion.
I recced you for the effort.
Originally posted by stockenThis epitomizes the kind of thing I'm against.
Your mother is an excellent whore and I hope your wife's rectum doesn't hurt too much. I'll go easier on her next time. HA!
Hiding behind the veil of an anonymous screen namd and saying something so vile and disgusting that you would never dare to say to someone's face.
Originally posted by Red NightFirstly, you're being hypocritical as your hiding behind a screen name.
This epitomizes the kind of thing I'm against.
Hiding behind the veil of an anonymous screen namd and saying something so vile and disgusting that you would never dare to say to someone's face.
Secondly, that's pure unfounded assumption. You've got absolutely no idea if he would say that to someone in person.
Originally posted by Daemon SinPeople don't say those sort of things to other people in the real world.
Firstly, you're being hypocritical as your hiding behind a screen name.
Secondly, that's pure unfounded assumption. You've got absolutely no idea if he would say that to someone in person.
You remember the real world don't you?
Oh, and BTW, I already challenged you and you ran away.