a poem

jackjones

General

30 Jul 08

jackjones

Joined: 18 Jul 08
Moves: 40201

30 Jul 08

on the flowerpot,
the butterfly listens
true budda dharma

rbmorris

Vampyroteuthis

Infernalis

Joined: 13 Apr 04
Moves: 100353

30 Jul 08

Originally posted by jackjones
on the flowerpot,
the butterfly listens
true budda dharma

Hulk SMASH!!!

Lukerik

Stick your hands up

Your bum

Joined: 26 Jul 07
Moves: 28451

30 Jul 08

Shouldn't the second line have an extra syllable?

Sunburnt

🙏🏻

Some other realm

Joined: 03 Aug 06
Moves: 25534

30 Jul 08

Originally posted by rbmorris
Hulk SMASH!!!

Thank you for providing my evening guffaw.

Jigtie

Joined: 21 Nov 07
Moves: 4689

31 Jul 08

Originally posted by jackjones
on the flowerpot,
the butterfly listens
true budda dharma

You should know
Few around here like
poetry

I don't know if you're counting ons (however that works in English) and if
that's the reason the second line in your haiku uses only six syllables, but
regardless of that, I like it.

🙂

schakuhr

Joined: 12 Feb 05
Moves: 47202

31 Jul 08

wat

Jigtie

Joined: 21 Nov 07
Moves: 4689

31 Jul 08

Originally posted by schakuhr
wat

THIS IS MADNESS!!!

schakuhr

Joined: 12 Feb 05
Moves: 47202

31 Jul 08

Originally posted by Jigtie
THIS IS MADNESS!!!

I suppose you would like me to make a terribly clever reference to "300", however I suggest you do not trust to hope. It has forsaken these lands.

Jigtie

Joined: 21 Nov 07
Moves: 4689

31 Jul 08

Originally posted by schakuhr
I suppose you would like me to make a terribly clever reference to "300", however I suggest you do not trust to hope. It has forsaken these lands.

Gimli or Leonidas. Either way: THIS IS MADNESS!!!

schakuhr

Joined: 12 Feb 05
Moves: 47202

31 Jul 08

Originally posted by Jigtie
Gimli or Leonidas. Either way: THIS IS MADNESS!!!

Bosse de Nage

Zellulärer Automat

Spiel des Lebens

Joined: 27 Jan 05
Moves: 90892

31 Jul 08

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Originally posted by jackjones
on the flowerpot,
the butterfly listens
true budda dharma

butterflies taste with
their feet, fornicate themselves
dead, poor li'l flitters.

rookie54

free tazer tickles..

wildly content...

Joined: 09 Mar 08
Moves: 205478

31 Jul 08

upon a cutting board...
a squash met tha edge...

and fell...

tha lettuce followed...
with onion in tow...

happy...

ripe tomato, juicy drips...
hard-cooked egg, heady...

shredded...

an office memo lunch.

rookie