My novel

Originally posted by Derfel Cadarn
A little editing job for you...

...and the man had sex with the woman while beating up her husband. Wiping himself on her curtains, he split her head open with an axe. With a grimace, he wiped the blood from his face and trudged down the hall, searching for the kids.

Originally posted by SJ247
AFTER wiping himself on her curtains, with one strong blow he splits her head open with an axe, easily busting through the skull, sending her blood-soaked mind on a red-eye flight to the white plaster ceiling.

I would start with: "It was a day like any other, except the date was different."

Originally posted by SJ247
Dottie, are you looking to us to continue with the story, looking for honest feedback, or is this some kind of unfunny joke?

"It was a dark, rainy night" is a bad opener. Throw the rain detail in, as he's trying to light is cigarette.

Originally posted by dottewell
Clearly, it's some kind of unfunny joke.

Originally posted by SJ247
AFTER wiping himself on her curtains, with one strong blow he splits her head open with an axe, easily busting through the skull, sending her blood-soaked mind on a red-eye flight to the white plaster ceiling.