1. Hmmm . . .
    Joined
    19 Jan '04
    Moves
    22131
    22 Apr '10 05:02
    A Twist on Buson

    There on my Buddha-bell, sound asleep,
    a fearsome wasp!

    __________________________________________


    Buson’s original has, asleep on the temple bell, a butterfly.

    I came up with this little haiku a few days ago, while sitting in casual clear-mind on our porch next to my hanging bell (which has a rich, resonant and long-lasting sound), when I noticed a wasp had settled on it, and remained still for (it seemed) quite some time.

    This “sequel” is a bit more in Issa’s style perhaps:



    Fearsome wasp on my Buddha-bell,
    I’m going to wake you up now!


    ____________________________________________


    The “spirituality” here? Depends on what metaphors one might find. The haiku itself discloses no particular “meaning”—that can only arise in engagement by the mind of a reader.
  2. Standard memberblack beetle
    Black Beastie
    Scheveningen
    Joined
    12 Jun '08
    Moves
    14509
    22 Apr '10 08:15
    Originally posted by vistesd
    A Twist on Buson

    There on my Buddha-bell, sound asleep,
    a fearsome wasp!

    __________________________________________


    Buson’s original has, asleep on the temple bell, a butterfly.

    I came up with this little haiku a few days ago, while sitting in casual clear-mind on our porch next to my hanging bell (which has a rich, resonant and long-lasting s ...[text shortened]... elf discloses no particular “meaning”—that can only arise in engagement by the mind of a reader.
    Prison-breakers of
    A fading reality
    All Busons' haikus😵
  3. Melbourne, Australia
    Joined
    17 Feb '04
    Moves
    49977
    22 Apr '10 11:48
    Haiku's are easy
    But sometimes they don't make sense
    Refrigerator
  4. Standard memberblack beetle
    Black Beastie
    Scheveningen
    Joined
    12 Jun '08
    Moves
    14509
    22 Apr '10 11:59
    Originally posted by amannion
    Haiku's are easy
    But sometimes they don't make sense
    Refrigerator
    It’s vacation or
    Vocation, some are freezing
    Some are not. So what?
    😵
  5. Hmmm . . .
    Joined
    19 Jan '04
    Moves
    22131
    22 Apr '10 16:341 edit
    In writing haiku
    in English, not Japanese,
    set syllabics fail
  6. Donationrwingett
    Ming the Merciless
    Royal Oak, MI
    Joined
    09 Sep '01
    Moves
    26187
    22 Apr '10 19:01
    When writing haikus I'm a cheat,
    my lines have four iambic feet.
  7. Standard memberkaroly aczel
    the Devil himself
    Brisbane,QLD
    Joined
    11 Apr '09
    Moves
    91549
    25 Apr '10 22:13
    All things fade
    My arse is still hanging in the wind
    Look,another daisy


    Materiality is an illusion
    Haikus are cool but not for me
    where is my mind?
Back to Top