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  1. SubscriberC J Horse
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    31 Mar '20 12:42
    It's a short poem and I wondered what people might think in terms of its quality and emotional appeal. I have a reason for asking. I should stress that I AM NOT the author.

    Waiting! Waiting!
    Waiting for a letter
    Waiting every day.

    Will a letter ever come
    Telling me good news?
    Will a letter ever come
    Telling me any news?

    A knock on the door
    A knock on the door
    A letter has come
    A letter has come.

    Bad news! Bad news!
    He's dead! He's dead!
    Oh what can I do
    Now he's dead?
  2. SubscriberGhost of a Duke
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    31 Mar '20 13:15
    @C-J-Horse

    Not great to be honest old chap.
  3. Subscriberrookie54
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    31 Mar '20 13:17
    @C-J-Horse
    i like it
    it lacks resolution that might be helpful
  4. SubscriberVery Rusty
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    31 Mar '20 13:17
    @c-j-horse said
    It's a short poem and I wondered what people might think in terms of its quality and emotional appeal. I have a reason for asking. I should stress that I AM NOT the author.

    Waiting! Waiting!
    Waiting for a letter
    Waiting every day.

    Will a letter ever come
    Telling me good news?
    Will a letter ever come
    Telling me any news?

    A knock on the door
    A knock on the door ...[text shortened]...
    A letter has come.

    Bad news! Bad news!
    He's dead! He's dead!
    Oh what can I do
    Now he's dead?
    A gallant effort! 🙂

    A big thumbs up for you too!

    -VR
  5. SubscriberGhost of a Duke
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    31 Mar '20 13:29
    @C-J-Horse

    I rewrote it old chap. (Hope you don't mind? )


    She waits for a letter,
    like the burning of a fuse,
    its content may destroy her
    but she's desperate for news.

    'He's dead he's dead!'
    the letter cries,
    what can she do,
    but wipe her eyes?
  6. SubscriberVery Rusty
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    31 Mar '20 13:311 edit
    @ghost-of-a-duke said
    @C-J-Horse

    I rewrote it old chap. (Hope you don't mind? )


    She waits for a letter,
    like the burning of a fuse,
    its content may destroy her
    but she's desperate for news.

    'He's dead he's dead!'
    the letter cries,
    what can she do,
    but wipe her eyes?
    No his was better!

    Stop trying to put words in his mouth! 😉

    -VR
  7. Subscriberrookie54
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    31 Mar '20 13:37
    Where have all the flowers gone
    Long time passing
    Where have all the flowers gone
    Long time ago
    Where have all the flowers gone
    Young girls pick them, every one
    Oh, when will they ever learn
    Oh, when will they ever learn
    Where have all the young girls gone
    Long time passing
    Where have all the young girls gone
    Long time ago
    Where have all the young girls gone
    Gone for husbands, every one
    Oh, when will they ever learn
    Oh, when will they ever learn
    Where have all the husbands gone
    Long time passing
    Where have all the husbands gone
    Long time ago
    Where have all the husbands gone
    Gone for soldiers, every one
    Oh, when will they ever learn
    Oh, when will they ever learn
    Where have all the soldiers gone
    Long time passing
    Where have all the soldiers gone
    Long time ago
    Where have all the soldiers gone
    Gone to graveyards, every one
    Oh, when will they ever learn
    Oh, when will they ever learn
    Where have all the graveyards gone
    Long time passing
    Where have all the graveyards gone
    Long time ago
    Where have all the graveyards gone
    Gone to flowers, every one
    Oh, when will they ever learn
    Oh, when will they ever learn
    Where have all the flowers gone
    Long time passing
    Where have all the flowers gone
    Long time ago
    Where have all the flowers gone
    Young girls have picked them, every one
    Oh, when will they ever learn
    Oh, when will they ever learn.

    Pete Seegar
  8. SubscriberVery Rusty
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    31 Mar '20 13:571 edit
    @rookie54 said
    Where have all the flowers gone
    Long time passing
    Where have all the flowers gone
    Long time ago
    Where have all the flowers gone
    Young girls pick them, every one
    Oh, when will they ever learn
    Oh, when will they ever learn
    Where have all the young girls gone
    Long time passing
    Where have all the young girls gone
    Long time ago
    Where have all the young girls gone
    Gon ...[text shortened]... picked them, every one
    Oh, when will they ever learn
    Oh, when will they ever learn.

    Pete Seegar
    One of Pete Seeger's songs?

    -VR
  9. Subscriberrookie54
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    31 Mar '20 14:00
    @very-rusty said
    One of Pete Seeger's songs?

    -VR
    yer mind is an amazing gravity well
    nothing escapes you, eh?
  10. SubscriberVery Rusty
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    31 Mar '20 14:08
    @rookie54 said
    yer mind is an amazing gravity well
    nothing escapes you, eh?
    Are you pretending to be Canadian with the Eh?

    Or your way of throwing an insult! 😛 😉

    -VR
  11. SubscriberC J Horse
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    31 Mar '20 15:08
    @ghost-of-a-duke said
    @C-J-Horse

    I rewrote it old chap. (Hope you don't mind? )


    She waits for a letter,
    like the burning of a fuse,
    its content may destroy her
    but she's desperate for news.

    'He's dead he's dead!'
    the letter cries,
    what can she do,
    but wipe her eyes?
    Not great to be honest old chap. Doggerel, really.

    I'll say again. I didn't write it.
  12. Subscribersonhouse
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    31 Mar '20 15:11
    @rookie54
    Actually Pete Seeger. I played on stage with and met him at a bar one time where he played my Martin 12 string guitar and taught me his tune Living in the country.
  13. SubscriberGhost of a Duke
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    31 Mar '20 15:121 edit
    @c-j-horse said
    Not great to be honest old chap. Doggerel, really.

    I'll say again. I didn't write it.
    I know sir, that's why I gave honest feedback.

    (Prolific repetition in a poem rarely works).
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    31 Mar '20 16:002 edits
    @Ghost-of-a-Duke

    All I can say it - 'No news is good news' (as it was about news).

    Good contributions.
  15. SubscriberVery Rusty
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    31 Mar '20 17:32
    @sonhouse said
    @rookie54
    Actually Pete Seeger. I played on stage with and met him at a bar one time where he played my Martin 12 string guitar and taught me his tune Living in the country.
    That must have been a thrill for you!

    -VR
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