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Forged in heat
Evil torture, and
I became
Born in filth
Starlight bending, and
I became
Taste of foul
Moonlight breaking, and
I became
Scent of rot
Earthworms ate me, and
I became
Sense of wrong
Thoughts betrayed me, and
I became
No more hope
All desert me, and
I became
No more tears
Passion killed me, and
I became
No more joy
Hate destroyed me, and
I became
Life in all
Flower scenting, and
I became
Frisky fog
Glist in water, and
I became
Sunlight streak
Mountain heaven, and
I became
Song of wind
Struggling pine tree, and
I became
Forged in heat
Through death and new life
I became
Originally posted by stockenAwesome epic! I
Forged in heat
Evil torture, and
I became
Born in filth
Starlight bending, and
I became
Taste of foul
Moonlight breaking, and
I became
Scent of rot
Earthworms ate me, and
I became
Sense of wrong
Thoughts betrayed me, and
I became
No more hope
All desert me, and
I became
No more tears
Passion killed me, and
I became
No more ...[text shortened]... ind
Struggling pine tree, and
I became
Forged in heat
Through death and new life
I became
never read a haiku ode
before! Very good!
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Originally posted by RookRAKTo have flames without marshmallows?
That's unfortunate.
Think what a great show it would
have been. Poof! Flame! Ash!
How could that possibly be
a good thing??? Tell me!
edit: the preceding demonstration of horrid counting skills is merely a counterpoint to balance the rest of this thread. Thank you. 😉
Originally posted by stockenforgive my ignorance but isn't a haiku supposed to be 3 lines of 5 then 7 then 5 sylabbles.
Forged in heat
Evil torture, and
I became
Born in filth
Starlight bending, and
I became
Taste of foul
Moonlight breaking, and
I became
Scent of rot
Earthworms ate me, and
I became
Sense of wrong
Thoughts betrayed me, and
I became
No more hope
All desert me, and
I became
No more tears
Passion killed me, and
I became
No more ...[text shortened]... ind
Struggling pine tree, and
I became
Forged in heat
Through death and new life
I became
your 3rd line in each of above 'I became' only has 3 sylabbles. What you have written isn't Haiku.
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Originally posted by malingaStocken prefers the
forgive my ignorance but isn't a haiku supposed to be 3 lines of 5 then 7 then 5 sylabbles.
your 3rd line in each of above 'I became' only has 3 sylabbles. What you have written isn't Haiku.
shorter form of the haiku
like this - three, five, three
There is also the tanka.
(ends with two lines of seven)
Hope this is
all clear for you now.
Post one soon