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Prose competition 2024

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@Bish said
That was me. Mrs. Bish was not impressed and was frankly a little concerned about my mental state. I was just having some fun.
I’d say that the big sister, being 10 years older than her little brother, was the one with a serious mental health issue. She should have been developing some maturity and had maternal instincts towards her baby brother, not beating him up 🥊🥊🥊

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@Drewnogal said
I’d say that the big sister, being 10 years older than her little brother, was the one with a serious mental health issue. She should have been developing some maturity and had maternal instincts towards her baby brother, not beating him up 🥊🥊🥊
Little brother or little sister? I don't think the narrator ever says.

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@Bish said
Little brother or little sister? I don't think the narrator ever says.
Ah I missed that …. I assumed the other child was an irritating younger brother, probably from my own experience of one.

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@Drewnogal said
Ah I missed that …. I assumed the other child was an irritating younger brother, probably from my own experience of one.
So much was left out (intentionally) . I think I pictured a brother too when I started. However by the time I got to 400 words or so, it had taken on a life of its own.

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@Bish said
So much was left out (intentionally) . I think I pictured a brother too when I started. However by the time I got to 400 words or so, it had taken on a life of its own.
I’d be interested to know how her children turned out in the end?

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@Great-Big-Stees said
I had, in the fog of early morning, thought it was one of the other entrants. This is why I don’t “gamble”.🤔😲😉👍
You thought that evil sister was me didn’t you! Admit it 🤨🫤😖

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@Drewnogal said
You thought that evil sister was me didn’t you! Admit it 🤨🫤😖
Sighs…I thought it was your elder sister but please…don’t tell her I said that.🤞😲😉

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@Great-Big-Stees said
Sighs…I thought it was your elder sister but please…don’t tell her I said that.🤞😲😉
Aw, she was lovely, she was like a mum to me 🥰

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@Drewnogal said
Nice work everyone! 👏

I’ve never been a fan of science fiction stories but No 4 really entertained me. Thought it was fab 🏅
Thank you for your kinds words. I'll own up to No. 4.

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@moonbus said
Thank you for your kinds words. I'll own up to No. 4.
Mine was the one that made Rookie’s eyes glaze over after the second line 😵‍💫

I thought his critiques somewhat harsh. No more green thumbs for HIM!

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@Drewnogal said
Mine was the one that made Rookie’s eyes glaze over after the second line 😵‍💫

I thought his critiques somewhat harsh. No more green thumbs for HIM!
I thought it was yours, I need a next chapter though. 🙂 It was that good.

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@Drewnogal said
Mine was the one that made Rookie’s eyes glaze over after the second line 😵‍💫

I thought his critiques somewhat harsh. No more green thumbs for HIM!
Well I liked it, and thought it was well written. Would have given it 2nd place (after Moons, which was more my genre).

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@Ghost-of-a-Duke said
Well I liked it, and thought it was well written. Would have given it 2nd place (after Moons, which was more my genre).
Thank you! That’s a big compliment considering I failed English Language O’Level along with 3 others at 16. The price of truanting I guess? I did pass it a few years later mind.

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As everybody imagined anayway the boring one (#3) was by me. I mostly had written to have something in hand I didn't manage to write another one...

Any way thank you all writers and readers.

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@Drewnogal said
Mine was the one that made Rookie’s eyes glaze over after the second line 😵‍💫

I thought his critiques somewhat harsh. No more green thumbs for HIM!
You can't please everyone all the time.