"Great 21st Century Novel"

Originally posted by Grampy Bobby
Hey, Big Stees, seems to be coming clear that you have introduced the first person pronoun of the first chapter, central character Doyle

and hero of the novel... perhaps we're discovering an autobiography. If so, our creative work is now crying aloud for an equally charismatic

and thoughtful heroine. Perhaps his lovely girlfriend. Yes? -gb 🙂

Elizabeth?

It really should be Elizabeth. Auburn hair, with hint of gold. Pale of complexion, slim but unnervingly tall by comparison to Doyle. Utterly his equal, yet subbordinate in a most endearing way?

Originally posted by Policestate
Elizabeth?

It really should be Elizabeth. Auburn hair, with hint of gold. Pale of complexion, slim but unnervingly tall by comparison to Doyle. Utterly his equal, yet subbordinate in a most endearing way?

So how about recasting those well chosen words to introduce Elizabeth in the next sentence of our narrative...


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24. Sheila had a crush on Doyle, but she knew that she would never be able to "connect" with him, unless she learned the King's Gambit. It was so frustrating trying to play the black side, until she discovered 2. . . . .Be7.

35. but Sheila also knew that she had one other obstacle to "connecting" with Doyle, and that was Elizabeth, that horrid phoney so-called "Queen"

Originally posted by coquette
35. but Sheila also knew that she had one other obstacle to "connecting" with Doyle, and that was Elizabeth, that horrid phoney so-called "Queen"

Nice of you to bring Policestate's Lady Elizabeth to the party. Finally
the story is developing a small population, including an antagonist.

🙂

Originally posted by coquette
35. but Sheila also knew that she had one other obstacle to "connecting" with Doyle, and that was Elizabeth, that horrid phoney so-called "Queen"

36. Doyle was faced with consuming questions... three of which were "Is there really

a question?" and "If so, must I answer it now?" and "Do I truly love Sheila?"

Originally posted by Grampy Bobby
36. Doyle was faced with consuming questions... three of which were "Is there really

a question?" and "If so, must I answer it now?" and "Do I truly love Sheila?"

37. Faced with some of the true predicaments of modern life, Doyle decided to spend some of his precious time 'bank' on analysing his options.

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38. ________

Originally posted by Lundos
37. Faced with some of the true predicaments of modern life, Doyle decided to spend some of his precious time 'bank' on analysing his options.

38. This reflective approach was somewhat native to the grain for Doyle, who in his other passion for creative

writing had learned early on to write hot, refrigerate the draft for a few days before revising cold.

Originally posted by Grampy Bobby
38. This reflective approach was somewhat native to the grain for Doyle, who in his other passion for creative

writing had learned early on to write hot, refrigerate the draft for a few days before revising cold.

39. Being reflective had a tendancy to make him thirsty, leading him to the fridge where he saw the calendar ... with today's date circled on it!







(edited by request, even though I believe the numbering system detracts from the story)

Originally posted by pawnhandler
39. Being reflective had a tendancy to make him thirsty, leading him to the fridge where he saw the calendar ... with today's date circled on it!







(edited by request, even though I believe the numbering system detracts from the story)

40. What was it that was so important today?



(and for the record, I agree with pawnhandler)

41. I'll ask Fritz, my oldest of friends must help me!