Hi Fellow RHP members,
I wrote a “crappy” essay about why I like chess. Below is what I come up with so far. However, I need to revise it before I turn in this Tuesday.
I desperately need help in editing and grammar. I would greatly appreciate if anyone could suggest any worthwhile ideas to add to the essay or to delete any unnecessary ideas. Sorry, my English is not good enough that’s why I need help from native English speakers.
Thanks in advance,
Gino
My Chess Addiction
I am very fond of chess because it is an entertaining, psychological strategy game. Playing chess regularly helps to control my emotions and improve my critical thinking skills. It also is a great way to socialize with people and make new friends. The competitive nature of the game satisfies my competitive soul. I tremendously enjoy playing chess, solving chess tactics, reading chess literature, and keeping my opening theory up to date especially by adding novelty moves of the chess masters to my opening repertoire. Chess is not just a game it is a whole other lifestyle when you play in a competitive level.
Chess is the only board game that is not boring to me. I also play backgammon because it’s very popular board game where I was raised. However, I like chess the most because it has different forms of playing. One way is the traditional, face-to-face, over the board chess and another is correspondence chess which is played through the mail. I currently am a member of United States Chess Federation and I have played some over the board tournaments but I enjoy playing correspondence chess because it’s more convenient and I can have a lot of time to analyze the positions without having to worry about time trouble.
Chess is a very creative strategy game. I get so much enjoyment playing chess because I can get a well-deserved victory with my skills or create my own self-destruction. Chess is not a game of luck; it is based on pure science, logical thinking and immense creativity. There is always one “best” move on the board scientifically and it can be generated by the help of advanced computer programs. However, this does not mean you always have to play the best moves to gain a victory in a game of chess; there are numerous playing styles that you can choose from. You can be a reckless attacking player with lots of tactical vision or a defensive genius with excellent endgame technique. At any level of chess, it is extremely important to be efficient when managing your chess clock because everybody has an equal and limited amount of time. The more experienced you are, the more confident you feel deciding how much time you need for each move. Time management is definitely vital and strategically useful when playing chess.
To learn how to play chess is moderately easy but to win in a game of chess is not. You can ruin your whole game with a single bad move you make in a careless moment so you need to be psychologically ready. You need to be alert to the many tactical possibilities on the board and fully concentrated on your next move and your overall plan in general. You should consider your opponent’s best plan and his psychology as well because not only your knowledge but also your opponent’s knowledge and temperament affect state of affairs in the game. This is well explained by the legendary, four-time-world champion, chess grandmaster Alexander Alekhine: “One has to have a knowledge of human nature and the opponent’s psychology for the purpose of the chess struggle. In earlier times, the struggle was conducted only by means of the pieces, we, on the other hand, struggle (or at least try to struggle) with our opponent, our enemy, with his will-power, his nerves, his individual characteristics and last but not least with his vanity.”
In chess, you need to be subtle, calm, patient and clever enough to outthink your opponent with your calculative skills and long-term memory. This is why it is considered the ultimate psychological war game.
Originally posted by GinoJnice quote on your profile from dr. dre; the essay doesnt hook the reader
Hi Fellow RHP members,
I wrote a “crappy” essay about why I like chess. Below is what I come up with so far. However, I need to revise it before I turn in this Tuesday.
I desperately need help in editing and grammar. I would greatly appreciate if anyone could suggest any worthwhile ideas to add to the essay or to delete any unnecessary ideas. Sorry, my ...[text shortened]... e skills and long-term memory. This is why it is considered the ultimate psychological war game.
Originally posted by EcstremeVenomHow about the quote I took from A. Alekhine (from Kotov's book Think Like a Grandmaster pg 130) in the above essay?
nice quote on your profile from dr. dre; the essay doesnt hook the reader
Does it fit ok?
Do you have any other helpful suggestions?
p.s. There is also Ginuwine sayin' the same $hit check below:
http://www.tsrocks.com/g/ginuwine_texts/same_ol_g.html
Originally posted by GinoJblend your quote with the essay better, not say alekhine says: bla bla bla, and it sounds like a boring history paper, like if you were to read it to a classroom or something you would sound very monotoned; that is what i picture when i read it. it should have voice
How about the quote I took from A. Alekhine in the above essay?
Does it fit ok?
Do you have any other helpful suggestions?
Originally posted by EcstremeVenomExactly. That's an excellent point.
blend your quote with the essay better, not say alekhine says: bla bla bla, and it sounds like a boring history paper, like if you were to read it to a classroom or something you would sound very monotoned; that is what i picture when i read it. it should have voice
The paper is kind of like, Chess is this, chess is that etc...
Originally posted by Ice ColdI like your "Master of puppets-Sanitarium theme."
Just add a {jamesearljones] [/jamesearljones] then 😕
Very nice!
Do you have any geniuine suggestions?. So that I can finish the essay and submit the next move in our game 😀
edit: I NEED SOMETHING SPECIFIC. PLEEEASE. HELP ME GUYS.
Originally posted by GinoJPossiblty eliminate some of the "I"s in it. Make it more about chess and less about you.
I like your "Master of puppets-Sanitarium theme."
Very nice!
Do you have any geniuine suggestions. So that I can finish the essay and submit the next move in our game 😀
Originally posted by Lundosdont you think it is one of those papers where the reader is expected to know what chess is? i dont think the purpose is to inform the reader what chess is
I would chance to structure a bit. First explain what chess is and then why I like it.
Originally posted by EcstremeVenomMy chess idol, four-time-world champion, the legendary Alexander Alekhine summarized the psychological aspects of the game very efficiently: “One has to have a knowledge of human nature and the opponent’s psychology for the purpose of the chess struggle. In earlier times, the struggle was conducted only by means of the pieces, we, on the other hand, struggle (or at least try to struggle) with our opponent, our enemy, with his will-power, his nerves, his individual characteristics and last but not least with his vanity.”
are you going to fix the problem and repost it?
is this better or same or even more boring?
Originally posted by EcstremeVenomI wrote this paper last month. The assignment was "Write about something you like and you have enough knowledge".
dont you think it is one of those papers where the reader is expected to know what chess is? i dont think the purpose is to inform the reader what chess is
Now this is another assignment : "Revise one of your papers you wrote before".
And the original Paper is below which I got 34 our of 35. The revised is the one I previously posted which I am trying to fix.
I hope it's clear.
The original essay before the revision (I even changed the title):
Why I like Chess
I am very fond of chess because it is an entertaining, psychological strategy game. It helps to control my emotions and improve my critical thinking skills. It also is a great way to socialize with friends and other people to satisfy my competitiveness. I tremendously enjoy playing chess, solving chess tactics, reading chess literature, and keeping my opening theory up to date especially by adding novelty moves of the chess masters to my opening repertoire. Chess is not just a game it is a whole other lifestyle when you play in a competitive level.
I find chess to be a very creative strategy game. It is the only board game that is not boring to me. I get so much enjoyment playing chess because I can get a well-deserved victory with my skills or worse create my own self-destruction. Chess is not a game of luck. It is based on pure science, logical thinking and immense creativity. There is always one “best” move on the board scientifically and it can be generated by the help of advanced computer programs. However, this does not mean you always have to play the best moves to gain a victory in a game of chess; there are numerous playing styles that you can choose from. You can be a reckless attacking player with lots of tactical vision or a defensive genius with excellent endgame technique but even if you are playing grandmaster level chess it is extremely important to be efficient when managing your chess clock because everybody has an equal and limited amount of time in competitive chess. The more experienced you are, the more confident you feel deciding on how much time you need to spend over a certain move. Time management is definitely vital and strategically useful when playing chess.
To learn how to play chess is moderately easy but to win in a game of chess is not. You can ruin your whole game with a single bad move you make in a careless moment so you need to be psychologically ready. You need to be alert to the many tactical possibilities on the board and fully concentrated on your next move and your overall plan in general. You should consider your opponent’s best plan and his psychology as well because not only your knowledge but also your opponent’s knowledge and temperament affect state of affairs in the game. You need to be subtle, calm, patient and clever enough to outthink your opponent with your calculative skills and long-term memory. This is why chess is considered the ultimate psychological war.