-Why I like Chess-

Originally posted by GinoJ
Forget about the score. It's not important, the more important thing is that I chose this essay to revise since I got full credits from all others.

The professor gave note outta 5 for the original essay . This might be helpul:

Focus: 5 (clear focus)
Topic Sentence: 5 (appropriate)
Use of Details: 4 (Ok, Give an actual example of playing chess)
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Process Pieces: 5 (All parts included)
Plus Factores: None
Total Points: 34 out of 35

Your teacher gave you a 34/35 for that shyte?!

Are you still in elementary school?

Originally posted by reader1107
Oh -- I thought it was an essay. There are rules for writing essays. If it's just a free-writing piece, that's different. My misunderstanding.

Rules suck.

I break rules all the time.

When teachers tell me I need an intro. 3 bodies and a conclusion I teach them a lesson by handing in a 10 paragraph essay, with the intro. and conclusion in the middle of the paper.

Originally posted by cmsMaster
Rules suck.

I break rules all the time.

When teachers tell me I need an intro. 3 bodies and a conclusion I teach them a lesson by handing in a 10 paragraph essay, with the intro. and conclusion in the middle of the paper.

What kind of grades do you get on those?

Originally posted by cmsMaster
Your teacher gave you a 34/35 for that shyte?!

Are you still in elementary school?

I'm not born America.

Originally posted by AThousandYoung
What kind of grades do you get on those?

34/35

Originally posted by EcstremeVenom
nice quote on your profile from dr. dre; the essay doesnt hook the reader

yeah, you need a "hook" statement to open the first paragraph with a bang!
make me want to read about chess...
don't forget, most people see chess as boring...
so you'll need to be creative to adjust to your audience...

Originally posted by cmsMaster
34/35

Check the last revision I turned in. It's not that bad.

Originally posted by GinoJ
Check the last revision I turned in. It's not that bad.

I'm a conceited jerk, I'll probably just say it's crap if I read it.

I mean, I might really think that too - but even if I don't, I might say something like 'I'm not impressed'.

Originally posted by cmsMaster
I'm a conceited jerk, I'll probably just say it's crap if I read it.

I mean, I might really think that too - but even if I don't, I might say something like 'I'm not impressed'.

I never wanted to impress anybody. I suck at English.

I just needed "help".

Some people helped me.

Whateva!