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http://www.shvoong.com/sociology/social-change/493449-growing-issue-deterioration-humanity/

I wrote it. Please give me a 5/5 !!! If you think its that good!! THANKS!!

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Originally posted by immortaltrinity
http://www.shvoong.com/sociology/social-change/493449-growing-issue-deterioration-humanity/

I wrote it. Please give me a 5/5 !!! If you think its that good!! THANKS!!
Religious grrrr

-100/5

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Originally posted by immortaltrinity
http://www.shvoong.com/sociology/social-change/493449-growing-issue-deterioration-humanity/

I wrote it. Please give me a 5/5 !!! If you think its that good!! THANKS!!
4+

Harri / Luck

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Drivel.

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why did u give it a one?

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Your thesis:
- God created Man with free will
- Man has subverted God's order
- Man has become materialistic
- Man is therefore no better than the animals (not races, dude!)

Isn't this meant to be a sociology paper?

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Originally posted by immortaltrinity
http://www.shvoong.com/sociology/social-change/493449-growing-issue-deterioration-humanity/

I wrote it. Please give me a 5/5 !!! If you think its that good!! THANKS!!
Actually this paper is not well written

The theses are unclear and not supported by any evidence (not even scripture).
The style is not that of a scientific essay, but of a rant or put more positive sermon (even a weak one)

This very post to beg for strangers to rate an articel as outstanding couls seen as proove that this statement

but rather as flawed beings for the means of spiritual and self growth in preparation for the afterlife

if meant to be applied to you is ringing true. You are a the very beginning of your journey.

Enjoy the journey!

After looking closer at your name and profile it even looks like you didn't write the article. I think it not likely that the author of that should call himself "immoral"...

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Originally posted by immortaltrinity
http://www.shvoong.com/sociology/social-change/493449-growing-issue-deterioration-humanity/

I wrote it. Please give me a 5/5 !!! If you think its that good!! THANKS!!
a quick scan revealed an assumption about us being made by god, plus the word god kept popping-up, this undermined my expectation as to its value and so i didnt read it.

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Originally posted by immortaltrinity
http://www.shvoong.com/sociology/social-change/493449-growing-issue-deterioration-humanity/

I wrote it. Please give me a 5/5 !!! If you think its that good!! THANKS!!
WHAT IS WITH ALL THE GOD STUFF? YOU ARE FROM CHINA...???????

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Originally posted by immortaltrinity
http://www.shvoong.com/sociology/social-change/493449-growing-issue-deterioration-humanity/

I wrote it. Please give me a 5/5 !!! If you think its that good!! THANKS!!
You confuse Humanity with Civilisation, thus making the whole end of your abstract wrong.

You don't use paragraphs, which makes the centre bit unreadable.

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I gave it a 1, I didn't understand it. Tone down the high-brow language professor. Sounds like a sophomore trying too hard to be intellectual and all grown up.

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Yes, if it was a theological essay it would rank well, but as Ragnarok says you're a mile off if you want good marks in Sociology - sweeping statements into givens simply will not go.

On the plus side, I like your style, but "depict" and "ramify" are errors, and you need to proof-read for punctuation errors. Nothing major. I couldn't fairly rate it because I don't know what age or grade you are.

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Originally posted by immortaltrinity
why did u give it a one?
Because 0 wasn't available?